Jeff Dinert TP6

Nakjoon and I met Wednesday, as it is our day now, at the Starbucks again, and we went over a different essay this time about A green economy, and whether it is viable to be a substitute for fossil fuels in the future. It was a good essay, short, choppy, some missing articles, but also some very well put together sentences, and I was able to give him a website for the purdue writing lab, and also a sheet of information from MLA about citing as well as the information for the writing lab in the Williams building as a resource for him in the Fall for help with his work. This time, and this was an essay for homework, a first draft I think, the essay was much more focused and even another paragraph longer, with a well placed quote, and good eveidence for his points about having to find an integrated green fossil fuel economy. I also heloped him check some of the ideas in his writing and asked if he thought these were consistent or not from what the English demonstrated, and he said that in fact a sentence that said something "was" needed to say something "was not" instead to make sense. I said Nakjoon, "You got to revise my man if you want to be a grad student." Nakjoon said he forgot but then really explained that it took a long time to write this and didn't get around to it before he forgot and emailed it to his teacher, so I forgave him, and then bought him a juice. We went over some of his homework from class, a paragraph about finding and correcting the errors in a sample paragraph, and he wanted to know why some things were marked wrong and we spent a while going over the mistakes, and me asking now which sentence sounds better to you? Which one sounds more like the Tom Clancy books you love? It is a good measure to say them in your head, or reread them before you just try to merely translate first. He thought that was an interesting observation, and I said I'd look at his this I believe paper this week, and have a couple of real grad essays from my friends with grad degrees for him to look at and keep for next time.